User talk:Tinomutenda RC

Your submission at Articles for creation: Namatai Kwekweza (May 13)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by TheTechie was:  The comment the reviewer left was: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.

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thetechie@enwiki: ~/talk/ $ 16:36, 13 May 2024 (UTC)

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Your submission at Articles for creation: Namatai Kwekweza (May 20)

Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed. Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reasons left by Ratnahastin were: Please check the submission for any additional comments left by the reviewer. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit after they have been resolved.

• If you would like to continue working on the submission, go to Draft:Namatai Kwekweza and click on the "Edit" tab at the top of the window.
• If you do not edit your draft in the next 6 months, it will be considered abandoned and may be deleted.
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Ratnahastin (talk) 05:40, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

Hi there. Hope you're good. Could you please dumb this down for me? How best can I resolve these issues? Tinomutenda RC (talk) 08:37, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

(talk page watcher) At first glance, most of the sources you provide just have minor mentions of the person, which doesn't make them notable. Also, dumb it down with the citation overkill, please. thetechie@enwiki: ~/talk/ $ 14:29, 20 May 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for that feedback. I appreciate it. Tinomutenda RC (talk) 11:18, 22 May 2024 (UTC)

If I may ask, which of these sources would you say are relevant enough? I'm now thinking of editing the article to be as minimal as possible with just the sources that are notable, but I'd like to know which ones would those be from this article for example. Tinomutenda RC (talk) 11:30, 22 May 2024 (UTC)

Alright, I'll be more specific. Here's my detailed feedback. I apologize for not being more specific earlier.

1. You usually wouldn't need citations for "advocate", "orator", "constitutionalist", "feminist", and "human rights activist".
2. We do not usually use words such as "advocate", "orator", "constitutionalist", and "feminist", remove those from the lead.
3. You have way too much citations on "advocate", "orator", "constitutionalist", "feminist", and "human rights activist", "Bill Number 2", and "its case". I'm especially concerned with the clumps of 6 inline citations altogether in 2 places in your draft.
4. The "Education" section cites no sources.
5. Do not link WELEAD Trust's website inline, instead de-link it, and put the website link in an "External links" section.
6. Make sure your citations demonstrate notability, still, a few of them seem broad and not talking about them specifically.
7. A few more minor things:
   1. Change "Early Life" -> "Early life": please make sure to maintain sentence case in headings.
   2. Fix the "Career" section. It sounds too much like an ad (for example, has been instrumental in fostering youth leadership).
   3. Be sure to link things which exist in Wikipedia; for example, if Bill Number 2 has an article on Wikipedia, link it! But do not link drafts.
   4. I know your question was about the sources in the article. There are too many for me to decide, but I'll let someone else help you if you like. If you really need help, using {{help me}} could potentially help you get a third opinion.

I know this reply was long, but I hope it helps you. thetechie@enwiki: ~/talk/ $ 00:13, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

It's actually very helpful and quite clear thanks. I appreciate the detailed feedback.

Concerning point no. 4, how do I use the 'help me' facility? Do I just go on there and ask people to look through this draft and review it for me? Tinomutenda RC (talk) 06:16, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

You start a new topic, you click "source", and type, {{help me}} followed by your question. thetechie@enwiki: ~/talk/ $ 14:14, 23 May 2024 (UTC)