Talk:USS Kansas (BB-21)/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:44, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
I'll have this done by tomorrow JAGUAR 19:44, 14 June 2015 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Initial comments
- "She made trips to Europe in 1910 and 1911 and after 1912" - are the trips in 1910 and 1911 separate?
- The lead is well written and summarises the article
- "She had a crew of 827 officers and men, though this increased to 881 and later to 896" - when was this? Did she begin service with 827 men?
- Yes, and this should be clarified now.
- " On 1 July, Kansas steamed out of Norfolk to carry the remains of the Venezuelan ambassador" - remains? It didn't say what happened
- DANFS doesn't say who the ambassador was or how he died, and I can't find any further information on him. I added "recently deceased" to the line to make it a bit clearer, though.
- " to protect a fast HX troopship convoy" - what is HX?
- It's a convoy designation - we have an article, HX convoys, but unfortunately it only focuses on the WWII use of the designation, so I didn't think it would be useful to link as it would probably confuse readers.
- "Rear Admiral Charles Frederick Hughes raised his flag aboard Kansas in Philadelphia as the flagship of the 4th BatDiv"- the Kansas was a flagship at one point? This was not mentioned in the lead
References
On hold
Just some very minor points to addressed. Once they're out of the way this will be another GA. JAGUAR 15:49, 15 June 2015 (UTC)