Talk:Timur Shah Durrani

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The text says "As usual with the Mongols..." while referring to Timur Shah's troops. It implies that Timur Shah's troops were Mongols. I feel this is wrong. -- Sudarshanhs 08:49, 24 March 2006 (UTC)

Second and Eldest?

"he was the second and eldest son of Ahmad Shah Durrani." What is this suppose to mean? It makes no sense to me.68.7.4.181 (talk) 19:39, 26 October 2011 (UTC)

Fixed. Noorullah21 (talk) 18:06, 28 July 2021 (UTC)

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Timur Shah Durrani/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 22:23, 26 January 2022 (UTC)

Reviewing now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 22:23, 26 January 2022 (UTC)

This article unfortunately has multiple issues:

• Severe language problems, including:
  • incomplete sentences (e.g., "While his father, Ahmad Shah Durrani was accompanied with Nader Shah"; this example could be fixed by combining with the previous sentence).
  • constant repetition of names instead of uses of replacements like "him", e.g.: protection of Timur Shah Durrani so he continuously stayed with Timur Shah Durrani
  • Sentences I do not understand, e.g. While his father, Ahmad Shah Durrani was accompanied with Nader Shah.
  • Timur Shah moved with his father to Kandahar with his father Ahmad Shah Durrani consolidating power – multiple problems here
• Lack of background information.
  • Many readers will not know about the Durrani Empire, it should be mentioned that it was an Afghan empire.
  • Introduce central terms and people.
  • Ideally provide a background section with general information for context.
• Wikification issues
  • Many duplinks, e.g. was accompanied with Nader Shah. After the assassination of Nader Shah – Nader Shah is linked both times.
  • avoid single-sentence paragraphs
  • I don't really understand your use of bullet points; e.g., they should not be used for quotations.
  • Paragraphs too long, should be split up
  • The list of sons: Why are the sons numbered? What does the numbers refer to?
• Lead too short, should summarise whole article
• Sourcing issues – some paragraphs lack inline citations

Closing note: I think this article still has to go a long way, and I have to quick-fail this, unfortunately. If you have any questions regarding the points raised above, please let me know. I encourage to renominate once the article is improved; see WP:NGA for a check-list what is needed. Thanks, --Jens Lallensack (talk) 22:39, 26 January 2022 (UTC)