Talk:Expedition of al-Muraysi'

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Story tag

The style problems in this article aren't particularly bad, but the tone is not quite formal enough to be encyclopedic. The second section in particular is very informal and has a more "story" like style. --D•g Talk to me/What I've done 02:20, 3 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hi can you tell me which section or sentance is informal or not encyclopeic, so i can fix it--Misconceptions2 (talk) 10:16, 9 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

i beleive i have made it more formal (so removed the tag), i made the following changes:


Got scared-->was terrified

The arabs going with them --> Arabs that accompanied them

Ran away-->fled

They took them all prisoners --> they took the entire tribe as prisoners

With there families herds and flock--> with there familes herd an flock

200 camels and 5000 sheep and goats, as well as 200 camels, 5000 sheep, goats, --> 200 camels, 5000 sheep, goats,

as well as a huge quantity of household goods which were captured as booty--> as well as a huge quantity of household goods which were captured as booty

bidder-->bidders

--Misconceptions2 (talk) 12:35, 25 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The title

I don't think that the word 'invasion' is a good translation for the Arabic word 'Ghazwah', which is more like a raid or an attack. It was only an oasis and not a whole country that was attacked, and after the raid prisoners and booty were carried home. I have tried to tidy this up a little, but it still needs more work. There is some disagreement (among classical Arab historians) about the year of the raid, and this should be mentioned. I have omitted constant mention of the Sunni collection of Hadith Sahih al-Bukhari and so on, since most Muslims would know them to be Sunni collections, and non-Muslims can just click the links to find out more.Ducky59 (talk) 20:23, 17 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]