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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 08:48, 26 June 2016 (UTC)
Lead
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- Replace "Erichto's role in Pharsalia has been much discussed by classicists" with "Enrichto's role in Pharsalia has often been discussed by classicists".
- Consider breaking up the last sentence, it's a little long and confusing to read.
In literature
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- Replace "It is likely that the character was inspired by legends of Thessalian witches that had developed during the period of Classical Greece" with "It is likely that the character was inspired by the legends of Thessalian witches developed during Classical Greece period".
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- When you say "she uses the body parts from these locales" - wouldn't it be locals and not locales?
- Replace "Indeed, she delight in otherwise" with "Indeed, she delighted".
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- Replace "It is exactly for this reason" with "It is for this reason".
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- Insert comma before and after himself in the excerpt "Medieval belief that Virgil himself was".
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- Close the quote "not so abominable as the wretched poets [i.e. Lucan and Ovid] painted me." - you forgot the last quotation. And maybe rethink the use of the brackets and replace with parenthesizes?
End of GA Review:
The entire article could use some work re-wording. It tries to keep too formal and due to that, sounds fairly awkward at certain points. Anyway, on hold for seven days to allow for these changes. Good luck and thanks, @PING me when you're done. Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 02:35, 29 June 2016 (UTC).